Teenagers are lazy monsters!
Some teenagers are active. They do their homework, go help their parents with shopping, dishes, cleaning the house and help them cook. So not all teenagers are lazy. There can be some that are tired and that is why people think teenagers are sloppy. Teenagers that are lazy do their homework in the last minute that is due. If their parents ask them if they have homework they will say ‘no’. Then their parents will look through their planner, after they will be in trouble. They will get a detention at school for not doing their homework on time.
Does it mean that teenagers are lazy when they stay at home, playing consoles, instead of going out with their parents?
Some people might think that teenagers are lazy because they do not see many teenagers out during the holiday time. Their attitude can change their way of being lazier, but when they wake up it will be hard for them to wake up because their bodies would still be asleep. Some teenagers after school would like stay out for a bit and then when they go back home they would say there tired and then ask their parents for food. A lot of teenagers that have consoles in their rooms would probably get annoyed and will go and play their console and they will forget their homework. Teenagers will do their homework on the last day because of their laziness.
Teenagers that are nearly becoming adults will think about their laziness and will start to get more active. If teenagers are on their laptop and doing homework they will stop their homework and would go on the internet to go speak to their friends, play games and go on YouTube and when their parents are in the living room. When teenagers are on YouTube they will be inspired to do YouTube when they are older.
When teenagers are going to be young adults they will start looking for jobs and an apartment to live in. They will be responsible for their own property and the way they live. Some teenagers will be looking for jobs that might not suit them and they will want to become a youtuber. Some youtubers inspire teenagers to become YouTube gamers, bloggers, and do challenges and q&a. Some people respect youtubers like I do (Comedyshortsgamer, Miniminter, Ksi, Xpertthief, Gameriot, Messyourself, Tbjzl, Twosync, Behzinga, Vikkstar123, Wroetoshaw). They inspire teenagers because they do stuff that some subscribers want them to do and reply to your comments. Comedyshortsgamer, Miniminter, Ksi, Xpertthief, Gameriot, Messyourself, Tbjzl, Twosync, Behzinga, Vikkstar123, Wroetoshaw).
When teenagers are on YouTube and they see gamers doing YouTube like doing a walkthrough for a game and people need help they will start playing. Games as well can affect their brains and they will start to act like the players in the game, they will start to get addicted to the game and they will forget all about their homework. All teenagers around the age 13 to 18 are all interest to games and getting a girlfriend so then they will forget homework about school or revision for test. Some teenagers that are in year 10 or 11 might come late during the year they have to practise for their GCSE. Otherwise they will fail in life and won’t have a job and will go and live with their parents or on the streets. All teenagers have to start getting up early for school so when they get a job they won’t be late all the time.
Some teenagers that fail to get a job would probably start a career on YouTube, where people post viral videos.Like other people did to get money it might not work for everyone to get a lot of subscribers and earn money to live.
Just to sum up everything teenagers should start getting active because if they all ways come late to school they probably wouldn’t get a job because of their laziness and excuses. When teenagers are by the age of 16 they can and look for a job like being a waiter in the restaurant so they can get their own money so they can have the money so they can pay for their university.
So does it mean teenagers at the age of 16 start looking for jobs to get money?
April 13, 2015 at 2:21 am
sorry for the lateness of the post sir
April 20, 2015 at 7:37 pm
Hello Marly,
You raise some fair points here that shows you have listened to class discussion, but you often repeat yourself. I’m pleased that you have used paragraphs BUT does each paragraph have a clear purpose?
Targets
Look at your first sentence – how might you be clearer and more direct?
Learn the difference between their, there and they’re.
Aim to achieve the Perfect Paragraph badge by re-drafting a paragraph until it is perfect – look at spelling, punctuation and grammar.
Where and how might you be more concise? Where have you repeated yourself? How might you avoid this?
April 24, 2015 at 6:38 pm
Sir I have corrected the paragraph to get a perfect paragraph
May 10, 2015 at 10:02 pm
Marly,
You’re nearly there with the Perfect Paragraph, but you must check your use of the words their, there and they’re.
Once you have done this, read the rest of your work and be sure that your sentences are the correct length – a good way to check is to see if you have used a conjunction (and, but, because, also) more than once during the piece.
Come and see me after School on Tuesday if you need some help.
June 3, 2015 at 8:15 am
Hello Marly,
I can see that you have acted on some of the targets above, but you need to be much more thorough when correcting vocabulary.
I’d like to read this through with you in person to help you get the badge.
Thanks,
Mr North